The Wedding Date


  1. Don't mean to be critical with this one, but many of the "I's" are not capitalized...and the writing seems kind of rough. And, in your shoes..I think I'd be a little more--let's say--subtle about such things as the woman's breasts(and I doubt she'd be that frank at the first meeting). AND, there is a VERY long "run-on sentence" toward the end. ; )


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